Balcony Tomato’s Lament

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Balcony Tomato’s Lament

July 13, 2011 by thisgirlremembers

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Bereft of love, I am doomed by your whim
To bear forevermore fortune’s heartless
Theft of the wide world from my seeking roots,
True home that now lies far below my reach.
For want of bees I submit to your hands,
Their graceless shaking of my blossoms a
Poor substitute for the sublime buzzing
Whereby I was meant to grow fruit-swollen.
Still, my life was meant for this: to produce,
And so I will not resist my instincts.
Fill your watering can, pour me rivers,
Stand me in the sun – I’ll grow tall for you.
Love of a kind fate may yet feel for me:
Above the distant earth the wind blows free.

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As part of my re-entry into writing, I thought I’d take on an expanded challenge this week, and see if I could fold several prompts into one poem – written for Poetry Tow Truck (prompt: backwards sonnet – first word rhymes); The Sunday Whirl (prompt wordle words used: world, whim, river, resist, buzz, instinct) and We Write Poems (prompt: write in another’s voice).

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on July 13, 2011 at 2:40 am | Reply Tilly Bud

Perhaps one of the saddest lines I’ve ever read: For want of bees
on July 13, 2011 at 3:27 am | Reply nan

Great imagery here – I was taken in by the title, and not disappointed throughout. Excellent write.
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on July 13, 2011 at 8:09 am | Reply vivienne Blake

The feat of combining three prompts in one merits admiration, but the success of the poem takes that a stage further. Bravo.
on July 13, 2011 at 8:49 am | Reply Daydreamertoo

I agree, wonderful, picture filled imagery, lovely prose.
on July 13, 2011 at 9:38 am | Reply gautami tripathy

Excellent write!

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on July 13, 2011 at 10:32 am | Reply Leo

Quite a wonderful re-entry into writing Enjoyed it. Tough to make it more than one prompt when each has its own theme.. You executed it well. Thanks for sharing.

My poem ~ A Poetic World
on July 13, 2011 at 12:48 pm | Reply expatinCAT

Beautiful poem..and photograph. // Peter.
on July 13, 2011 at 1:07 pm | Reply mindlovemisery

This is really incredible, such grace and beauty I wish I had even half your talent
on July 13, 2011 at 1:17 pm | Reply Marian Veverka

Even your title is great. At least my tomatoes are on the porch, not the balcony. Poor little critters. Good poem.
on July 13, 2011 at 5:10 pm | Reply Jingle

amazing,
on July 13, 2011 at 5:16 pm | Reply b_y

Neatly done. I like combining prompts, especially if you have one with style and another with subject. The image prompts at Magpie Tales work really well.
on July 13, 2011 at 7:08 pm | Reply Olivia

Loved it!!

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on July 13, 2011 at 8:18 pm | Reply Jo Bryant

Great imagery – now i must remember to be kind to my plant.
on July 13, 2011 at 9:20 pm | Reply Jeanne

I love this! romantic and lovely and the fact that it’s a tomato plant speaking just adds to the awesomeness!
on July 13, 2011 at 11:57 pm | Reply bluerose675

I love the title and beautiful imagery. I love this line “Stand me in the sun – I’ll grow tall for you”. Beautifully written
on July 14, 2011 at 4:01 am | Reply anl4

Lovely write!
on July 14, 2011 at 7:04 am | Reply ravenswingpoetry

Beautifully written, giving an eloquent voice to the domesticated plant with wonderful language and imagery.

-Nicole
on July 14, 2011 at 7:27 am | Reply wordsandthoughtspjs

Nicely combined prompts.

Pamela
on July 14, 2011 at 7:39 am | Reply Mr. Walker

Love this. A lovely blending of prompts, images, and ideas. The sonnet form is especially appropriate here, for the voice that you have chosen. It gives it a dignity that the narrator itself is not being treated with.

Richard
on July 14, 2011 at 4:42 pm | Reply Mike Patrick

We’ve always enjoyed the heart of the tomato, but who knew they had souls? I really enjoyed this.
on July 14, 2011 at 8:04 pm | Reply Kelly

What a wonderful voice this has. So much depth. Nice work!
on July 15, 2011 at 10:22 am | Reply Cassiopeia Rises

Excellent my friend. I don’t think I could have tackled all that at once. Awesome
work.

Melanie
on July 15, 2011 at 6:23 pm | Reply brenda w

Gorgeous, girl! Not only writing, but challenging yourself to write, too. Excellent writing.